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http://rapidshare.de/files/7093086/Ralu-Ho...pella_.mp3.html

 

this is a song i wrote last year for my best friend. i wan't to make her a surprize but i really don't like the sound of my voice on my songs so i need to know what you guys think of it.

 

here are the lyrics in case you don't understand something :blushing:

 

HOME BETWEEN THE STARS

 

When two hearts meet in one dream

And don't want to fall apart

You don't have another choice

Just to let them live

In a world where only love is

 

If you ever feel lonely and lost

In the journey that your heart has begun

Let your worries come to me

And you will see what a friend you have won

 

Chorus:Cause if we take our hands

And spread our wings and fly

We will always find a shelter in the sky

And if the world tries to breack our hearts

We'll make our friendship home between the stars

 

And all the widest oceans

And all the highest clouds

Won't be able to destroy

The friendship that we have

 

Chrous:x2

 

:shy:

J'aimerais tant savoir

Souffler comme le vent

Sur ton doux visage

Faire partir le noir, disparaître le temps

Casser les nuages

Parler même tout bas

Juste pout toi et moi

De petits riens

Mais là-bas

Au loin, tu nages...

 

 

 

  • 2 weeks later...
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Raluca, this is very beautiful!!! Congratulations!!!

I really like it, just imagine this with instruments, choir...... very very very good!!!!!

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thanks :shy: i thought it was bad since no one put their comments

J'aimerais tant savoir

Souffler comme le vent

Sur ton doux visage

Faire partir le noir, disparaître le temps

Casser les nuages

Parler même tout bas

Juste pout toi et moi

De petits riens

Mais là-bas

Au loin, tu nages...

 

 

 

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sorry ma friend! i was a little lazy to check CCI :P well i thought it was nice. i told you before :D love the lyrics gurl! :clap:
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The lyrics are nice and the melody is 'power ballade' style. The only critique I'll give you is to watch your pitch (which is hard when you're singing a capella...trust me I know), and to try and learn to sing from your diaphragm instead of your throat, so you don't sound like you're straining or "yelling". Your chorus is in such a high range that it would cause even the greatest singers to strain...because it's high all the way through and requires a constant effort for an extended period of time. You may even consider keeping the chorus low for the first two times and then exploding with that euphoric power in that high range for the last time.

 

It is a very charming, very attractive song. Keep up the creativity, Raluca. You're doing great.

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The lyrics are nice and the melody is 'power ballade' style. The only critique I'll give you is to watch your pitch (which is hard when you're singing a capella...trust me I know), and to try and learn to sing from your diaphragm instead of your throat, so you don't sound like you're straining or "yelling". Your chorus is in such a high range that it would cause even the greatest singers to strain...because it's high all the way through and requires a constant effort for an extended period of time. You may even consider keeping the chorus low for the first two times and then exploding with that euphoric power in that high range for the last time.

 

It is a very charming, very attractive song. Keep up the creativity, Raluca. You're doing great.

 

 

thanks for your comment! i figured that the chorus is too high i'll re-record it lower :)

J'aimerais tant savoir

Souffler comme le vent

Sur ton doux visage

Faire partir le noir, disparaître le temps

Casser les nuages

Parler même tout bas

Juste pout toi et moi

De petits riens

Mais là-bas

Au loin, tu nages...

 

 

 

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i think i did it :msn-tongue: listen and judge..but the "wind" is still there :glare:

 

http://rapidshare.de/files/7996667/Ralu-Ho...ion_2_.mp3.html

J'aimerais tant savoir

Souffler comme le vent

Sur ton doux visage

Faire partir le noir, disparaître le temps

Casser les nuages

Parler même tout bas

Juste pout toi et moi

De petits riens

Mais là-bas

Au loin, tu nages...

 

 

 

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The second attempt is MUCH better. It is much more suited to your voice, and the lower range makes it sound a great deal more tender and brings out the melody...which is what you want for that song, right?

 

Good job.

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The second attempt is MUCH better. It is much more suited to your voice, and the lower range makes it sound a great deal more tender and brings out the melody...which is what you want for that song, right?

 

Good job.

 

 

thanks :D

J'aimerais tant savoir

Souffler comme le vent

Sur ton doux visage

Faire partir le noir, disparaître le temps

Casser les nuages

Parler même tout bas

Juste pout toi et moi

De petits riens

Mais là-bas

Au loin, tu nages...

 

 

 

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It is G R E A T  !!!!!!! Your friend must've fainted when you presented it to him/her.

Absolutely beautiful.  :cry:  :clap:  :flowers:

 

Love,

Christine

 

 

thank you :blushing: yeah she really loved it :blushing: i really didn't expected her to like it so much :shy:

J'aimerais tant savoir

Souffler comme le vent

Sur ton doux visage

Faire partir le noir, disparaître le temps

Casser les nuages

Parler même tout bas

Juste pout toi et moi

De petits riens

Mais là-bas

Au loin, tu nages...

 

 

 

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